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Watever143
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Wording help
Need wording help please
Mix, mingle and move your feet. Enjoy the evening with no assigned SEAT
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Mix, mingle and move your feet. Enjoy the evening with no assigned SEATS
Message edited 5/24/2016 1:49:09 PM.
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MrsO
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Re: Wording help
I prefer 2nd one - there should be a comma before and though
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| Posted 5/24/16 11:20 AM |
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soontobemommyof2
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Re: Wording help
Posted by MrsO
I prefer 2nd one - there should be a comma before and though
This.
Edit: I'm reading the first sentence again and I actually like it cause it rhymes (feet/seat)
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| Posted 5/24/16 11:42 AM |
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sameinitials
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Re: Wording help
Posted by soontobemommyof2
Posted by MrsO
I prefer 2nd one - there should be a comma before and though
This.
there only needs to be a comma if the OP likes using oxford commas!
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| Posted 5/24/16 11:42 AM |
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klingklang77
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Wording help
I like the first one.
ETA: I wouldn't do the second one because you say THIS evening and then SEATS. So you make it specific with 'this' and then put in general with 'seats'. It's not a parallel structure to me.
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shadows
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Wording help
I also like the first one.
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Dani
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Re: Wording help
first 
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| Posted 5/24/16 12:09 PM |
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chilltocam
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Wording help
First one
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| Posted 5/24/16 12:31 PM |
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StaceyWill
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Wording help
1st one.
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| Posted 5/24/16 12:33 PM |
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ChilisWife
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Re: Wording help
Posted by MrsO
I prefer 2nd one - there should be a comma before and though
Wait where should the comma be? I do not see the word "though."
I like the first one because it seems like you are directing it at each person and one person only can occupy a seat (not seats).
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chilltocam
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Re: Wording help
Posted by ChilisWife
Posted by MrsO
I prefer 2nd one - there should be a comma before and though
Wait where should the comma be? I do not see the word "though."
I like the first one because it seems like you are directing it at each person and one person only can occupy a seat (not seats).
I think she meant there should be a comma before the word "AND". I think it's a matter of style preference and doesn't have to be there, but could be
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| Posted 5/24/16 1:15 PM |
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Watever143
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Wording help
The comma I have but forgot to write it in the post. I'm looking to hear opinions on seat and seats
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| Posted 5/24/16 1:40 PM |
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shadows
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Re: Wording help
Posted by Watever143
The comma I have but forgot to write it in the post. I'm looking to hear opinions on seat and seats
I already replied above but to me, feet/seat sounds much better than feet/seats.
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Watever143
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Wording help
The comma I have but forgot to write it in the post. I'm looking to hear opinions on seat and seats.
Also just relieved I sent this wrong it's enjoy the evening for both..
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